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28th of June 2015

otterkit

Hey lads and ladies,
I don't often do this, but I'd really like feedback and thoughts on the use of these letters as part of the plot. What do you think? As readers, are you okay with these being an integral part of the plot for a short while?

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28th of June 2015

Marscaleb

"When I write you, I want you to -something- any words you don't know."
"Dang, what is that word? If only I knew what she was asking me to do."

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28th of June 2015

Guest

The letter set up is good. I personally think you can improve it by breaking up the "letter" unto different "pages". It looks to be very long to have been written on standard sized paper, maybe a scroll, lol. :)
Integrating sketches into the "letter" is a wonderful idea, but you might want to work on how it's laid out in the letter.
Davinci's notebook is a good example. You can see how the pictures wrap around the text.

http://drawingacademy.com/wp-content/uploads/2014-11-07_545c23d211ae7_leonardo-da-vinci-anatomy.4.jpg

http://sciblogs.co.nz/code-for-life/files/2010/06/davinci-drawings-of-infants.jpg

Also, for a drawing reference, creating believable folds in a drawn letter is linked to the gradients of the opposing folds.

Some examples:

http://pe-images.s3.amazonaws.com/photo-effects/cs6/folds-creases/six-gradients.jpg

http://origami-instructions.com/images/square-base/thumbnails/creased-square.jpg

http://i.guim.co.uk/static/w-620/h--/q-95/sys-images/Guardian/Pix/pictures/2012/3/14/1331734037537/step_two.jpg

Hope you find this helpful. :)

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29th of June 2015

otterkit

Wow, thanks!

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29th of June 2015

Guest

No problem. ^_^
I'm happy to help. Love your comic, you've got a really compelling story (and universe) going here. :)

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